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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
...i think it needs help in spots...but i don't know how to fix it.......help????? I don't quite understand how you've gained my trust so soon and I really don't know how you brought happiness back to me but I won't complain, I promise; I never thought I'd be this content, again. I was nowhere close to happy I felt trapped--chained-confused. I'm still confused, but not so much-- and never the same way. I'm hoping now, looking forward, to the rest of my life and forever. I'll be here, I promise-- even when the world no longer turns. And even if you're not, you are-- you'll always be in my heart. You've brought my happiness back-- you've showed me its still there. and I don't know, I can't see, what will happen in a year; the one just past is proof of that; I'm scared of this next year; but the world's still turning, it won't stop yet, and you've shown me that there's happiness left for me. Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
I don't quite understand how you've gained my trust so soon and I really don't know how you brought happiness back to me I really liked this  I don't think it needs any work at all.Nicely written If you love someone, let them go. If they come back, they were always yours. If they don't, they never were. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
I like this poem. No need to change a thing!! Keep up the awesome writing ~Zach~ "And so the lion fell in love with the lamb....,"he murmured. "What a stupid lamb," I sighed. "What a sick, masochistic lion." |
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