Teen Poetry #8 |
Assembly Required |
HersheyKiss Member
since 2008-06-02
Posts 137New Jersey |
Hey sorry it's been awhile. Things have been crazy. I wrote this the other day while visiting with jake. Its really bad but I'm like in a slump can't seem to write a decent poem. Assembly Required: Broken into pieces Not well wired If you come across me Some assembly is required There's been a lot of damage Much destruction taken place Some parts lost forever Impossible to trace Fractured Split Some sections Just don't fit A fragment A shard With no directions It is hard Go ahead and try Don't get too tired If you come across me Some assembly is required |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Wow Daniel. I really liked this! It lacks your signature overwhelming emotion but makes up for it (in my book) with a sense of urgency and the number of meanings contained. There's been a lot of damage Much destruction taken place Some parts lost forever Impossible to trace Brilliance. There's a fine line between Genius and Insanity |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
WOAH!!! you really do have some talent girl!\Krysti |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
yeah you have mad talent! |
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HersheyKiss Member
since 2008-06-02
Posts 137New Jersey |
thanks guys |
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lost-in-a-mind-of-dreams Junior Member
since 2008-05-24
Posts 35 |
wow i really like this to! *****dreamer***** |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I love this. One thing that I wish I could do is ryhme with such grace as you have. Everything just flows no matter where you break the lines. Brilliant. {~~*~~} "You are not loyal enough to eat my orange jelly beans!...'cuase dat's just how I roll.." |
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wisdomofthesword Member
since 2007-12-17
Posts 224the last place on earth |
i love this your so talented I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so |
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eternally_singing Member
since 2007-12-18
Posts 123PA, United States |
Good job! loved this |
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