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Unfortunate Disaster
Junior Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 17
Australia

0 posted 2008-05-08 11:56 AM

So theres this boy,
I love him so,
But am to afraid,
To let it show.

For another boy,
Who loves me too,
I cannot hurt,
What can I do?

I thought i loved another boy,
He stole away my heart,
Lied to me again and again,
And slowly ripped it apart.

I cannot choose between them,
For should i choose the wrong,
My heart would break and shatter,
And hurt me for too long.

I cannot kiss the boy i love,
For the boy i like would cry,
The one i lust will never love me,
And i still do not know why?

I can't control my feelings,
And my fellings cause me pain,
And if i just let go of them,
I'll never love again.

Romantic
Junior Member

since 2007-12-10

Posts 28
Lost in the eyes of the one i love

1 posted 2008-05-08 12:10 PM

This is a wonderful poem. it really flows, I love it, I would really like to read some more of them. Your a good poet keep up the good work!

Love... it is the best feeling in the world... but beware.. the path to happyness can hurt alot

Tripp'ncutie
Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 73
minnasota

2 posted 2008-05-08 12:54 PM

wonderful flow i enjoyed it, i always enjoy it when someone puts thier heart on paper.
wonderful work i would love to read some more too!

Unfortunate Disaster
Junior Member

since 2008-05-08

Posts 17
Australia

3 posted 2008-05-08 12:58 PM

why thankyou, that was terribly nice of you to say that but im just an amateur.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2008-05-08 03:15 PM

I like the Rondo sound to this...almost like
the little song of "Row, Row, Row your boat"

and even in it's personal confusion of
"who comes first" it is easy to see that
you are generous and compassionate with
your feelings.

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Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

5 posted 2008-05-08 04:14 PM

Wow.. uhmm at the moment i don't know how to help.. i'll tell ya later. this poem is really good though.. and welcome to PIP.

~Zach~

"Fate leads the willing, and drags along the reluctant."

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

6 posted 2008-05-09 02:04 AM

its always hard being stuck between two people not wanting to hurt anyone or yourself, I wish i could say something more helpful but unfortunately its a tricky subject. great poem and welcome to pip

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

7 posted 2008-05-09 05:32 PM

great first post hoping to read more

JJ

rmortimer1987
New Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 7
Qld Australia

8 posted 2008-05-10 09:01 AM

for a first post this is fantastic, although a tricky subject you have written beautifully how everythign feels. i am in a similar situation at the moment also and i can tell you this, the one you lust for will always hurt you, the one who loves you you will never feel the same about, and the one that you love may never even know you exist....
keep on writing and you will conquer anything that you may face.
Ruth

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