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I am the arch angel
Member

since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

0 posted 2008-04-23 11:05 PM

I haven't written in a while but something came up that only poetry could solve.....i decided to share it with you on PIP...enjoy..........
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If you ask, i will treat you well.
I ask of one thing, and you still make my life a living hell.

Moving on is something I'll have to do.
You said you loved me, but left without a clue.

Where'd you go,Where did you stay?
You took my heart and mushed it to like clay.

Just as my feelings for you started to crack.
When you started talking, i knew they came back.

You filled me with questions i could not answer.
Oh so confusing, as steps for a dancer.

Will you leave me alone, thats all i ask
I am tired of hiding behind this mask!

I cannot feel what you have done to me.
I am stronger than what you see.

You may of life since then,
But I'm pretty sure this isn't the end.

I'm sure this is not the last of you.
Promising me that you will stay away is not the truth.

The impact you have on me was oh so strong.
Saying goodbye for now is not wrong.......................

-Keagan............

earn your freedom of the charge of sacrificing your life for others

[This message has been edited by I am the arch angel (04-25-2008 08:07 PM).]

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

1 posted 2008-04-23 11:09 PM

Good job i really like this

JJ

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

2 posted 2008-04-24 12:19 PM

Keagan-

This is a very sentimental piece. I liked the flow and how it paused for a moment and changed beat. Giving the reader just enough time to wonder before clueing us in. Great Piece. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep your head up, things will get better soon!

-Kellie

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

3 posted 2008-04-24 05:44 AM

Keagan,
I love this piece.. it almost made me cry.. you have an amazing talent and there is so many people out here that love u too pieces.. Ur my lil cyber bro, don't forget that.. Hugs to you?

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-04-24 08:11 AM

Wow i guess all that waiting came up with this amazing poem! I love the subtle emotions pouring out of this poem. This poem just simply amazed me!! Great Work! And just like Jess said. Everyone here cares for ya'. Your like bro' to me. Hope things get better. =]

~Zach~

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

5 posted 2008-04-24 06:14 PM

A wonderful write, there's not much more I can say.

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

Tripp'ncutie
Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 73
minnasota

6 posted 2008-05-05 12:40 PM

this is the perfect poem for me as of this time, i just got out of a relationship.
omg i, i relate.i guess is the best way to describe the feelings i got from this poem.

you are a very great writer. i am quite immpressed. maybe someday soon you'll leave feed back on my work.

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