GET OUT! - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

0 posted 2008-04-23 08:35 PM

Stop let it go
Im done
We have to go are seperate ways
Im sorry
I cant do this anymore
You have to leave
Were never going to put this puzzle back together
The pieces dont fit
We've run out of time
Stop
Stop
Were done
Im sorry
I cant do this
It doesnt work that way
I cant
We have to go are seperate ways
Will find happiness
Just let it go
Stop
Please I cant do this
Were over
Im sorry
We had are chance
Were over
I cant do this
Please............
I have to escape from you
Its not worth it anymore
I'll always be here if you need someone though
If your ever in trouble dont be afraid
I just cant be with you anymore
I can be a friend but thats it
Good bye
The one Ill never forget.........

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

1 posted 2008-04-23 09:06 PM

This reminds me of when I was in junior high. I felt this very same way about my first boyfriend. We dated 7th, 8th and 9th grade, I dumped him right before we went to high school.

The friendships are often more powerful than the relationship. Sometimes you have to let go and move onto new things. This poem really speaks to the heart about the turmoil of young love.

It will be hard, but you will make it through. Just keep talking, and give each other time and space to heal. Clear your head. You will know when the time is right just pursue what makes you happy.

Great write. I felt the emotion, tugging, giving in a little and then pulling back again. Like a battle and that is just what love is.

-Kellie

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-04-23 11:05 PM

wow this...just wow i totally relate...lib

JJ

ShawtySheFly
Member

since 2007-12-19

Posts 71
In his Elevator (LOL)

3 posted 2008-04-24 11:13 AM

whoa intense much

I.>ROCK"my<Converse^cuz%i'm`RETRO*likeDAT

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

4 posted 2008-04-24 05:21 PM

Wow. i know how you feel. i felt the same when i broke up with my girlfriend.. grat poem i can feel the emotions behind your words.

~Zach~

crimsonXnails
Member

since 2008-02-10

Posts 108
dark/little/heavan.:*:.

5 posted 2008-04-24 05:28 PM

hey hey,
great write, wonderful feeling. one part right at the begining you said

"we have to go are seprate ways" i think you ment to say

"we have to go OUR seperate ways"

don't worry about it though. by the time i got to the end i was so into the emotion, i forgot what it was i was going to comment on until i reread it. great job

!Tracey!

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

masksrlife
Member

since 2008-03-26

Posts 109
Canada

6 posted 2008-04-24 05:36 PM

This was so good! i loved it and i can deffenitly relate! Loved the read.

*-crazycece-*

Tripp'ncutie
Member

since 2008-05-05

Posts 73
minnasota

7 posted 2008-05-05 01:19 PM

again great work, very emotional. also hit some personal strings and helped me realize some stuff too.

you are a great poet.
i hope ur one that leaves some feed back on my work.

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

8 posted 2008-05-05 03:47 PM

thanks for all the comments lol I havnt checked for a few days and it really makes me feel good to no people like my work

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.