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Nature's Call
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Nature's Call |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
*I thought I would try a different tactic on writing and this is what I came up with* All of us breaking as we fall Listening to music that saves us all The burning and stinging under my skin Taking everything down to this last win A voice in the morning light The purple fading with the shading so bright Clear are the words steady in the mind Flowing from pens so quickly they find Blue guitar notes found with in picks Their singing so sweetly from finger tips The fear of dark deep Coming loose with every sleep Willow the wisp touching feather likely Hair strands rushing in cobwebs so strangely With butterflies flying so close Faerie dust sparkles dashing with every last dose Hybrids soaring so high For the eagles come flashing by |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
a bit confusing, but i like it overall... really good flow, and the part about the guitar is really great and unique. |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
i like this its different but good! JJ |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
yea this is sort of confusing. but it sounds pretty good! ~Zach~ |
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