Teen Poetry #8 |
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Tonight |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
tonight a final thought only one more emotion a young girl left alone he leaves her there quietly unspoken she is shaking with fear & extremely cold this seems like its over and goodbye is told tonight a little girl lays cryig in her bed this certain little girl wishing she was dead laying lone in her room heartbroken and confused wondering what more she has to lose she's lost her love her life herself she feels all is lost and she cant survive she needs someone there to hold her and not let go to lay ther and comfort her while she's so low tonight a young girl will choose to let go should she let anyone know? Tonight a final thought one more emotion a young girl left alone she's surrounded by fear & exteremly cold suddenly her life is over goodbye untold..... hey itz been a while tell me what ya think... Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks! |
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since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Nice poem!!.. but im not sure if you put this in the right fourme. I think this poem might go better in dark poetry but its just a thought. ![]() This really is a great poem. I can't wait to see more of your work! ![]() Havea great day!! ~Zach~ |
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wisdomofthesword Member
since 2007-12-17
Posts 224the last place on earth |
great poem look forward to reading more I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
I really liked it. The flow was diffeent but it made sense. Great poem, {~~*~~} {&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand] |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
NiCe write! welcome to passions and hopeing to read more! JJ |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
wow thats awesome |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
omg that was awsome. it almost sounded like a song to me. n e ways great job only a vampire can love you forever. |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
thanks everyone!! Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks! |
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