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Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

0 posted 2008-04-10 10:29 PM

Okay, I haven't writing a long poem in a long timw without forceing it out. So I took my time and wrote this. i might be a little rusty lol. but hope you enjoy!!
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Sorrow slips out of the crack in my heart
Ripping its void wide apart
My memories fill my mind
To feel your presence, i'll never find

Never to feel your warmth, i'll always miss
Remembering how it felt to feel your velvet kiss
Deaths cruel hand took you away
Left me emotionally to decay
People say it'll be fine
but thats the thing i can't get you off my mind.

Every second pass, hurts me inside
The rip is deep and wide
Heart heavy like stone
Your gone, now left me alone

Heart sewn up with neatle and thread
Soul not broken, but feels so dead
Love feels like winter cold with its breeze
Left standing out in the cold to freeze.

left with a question wanting to know
If you really loved me so?

ShawtySheFly
Member

since 2007-12-19

Posts 71
In his Elevator (LOL)

1 posted 2008-04-11 11:51 AM

:'{ that was very strong....i lik it

I.>ROCK"my<Converse^cuz%i'm`RETRO*likeDAT

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-04-11 07:06 PM

yes very strong,i like this as well

JJ

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

3 posted 2008-04-11 07:12 PM

HA! SEE?! if u would have made me add on to that it would have sucked, But u made it a poem. Great job,

{~~*~~}

{&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand]
{`~Emily~`}

maddorani
Member

since 2007-11-18

Posts 423
houston,tx

4 posted 2008-04-12 02:59 PM

hey ur poem is really good

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

5 posted 2008-04-16 10:04 PM

Awesome! Very powerful!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

6 posted 2008-04-18 07:43 AM

Thanks everyone for reading!!!

~Zach~

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