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Teen Poetry #8

no title, just wrote down what's inside

Newman
New Member

since 2008-04-10

Posts 5

0 posted 2008-04-10 12:36 PM

i never thought the one i loved
would tear my world apart
and leave me with this emptiness
that runs straight through my heart

was me and her forever
thats what she used to say
so how could thing have changed this much
in just a matter of days

she told me that she loved me
as she looked into my eyes
why the sudden change of heart
or was it all just lies

i miss that way she made me felt
i miss the smell of her skin
i miss having her held against me
she was my everything

i miss the touch of her lips
and the freckles across her knows
thought the pain would go away
but it only seems to grow

i thought our love would last forever
thought that my heart was her home
but that wasn't how she say it
cause she's left me all alone

i wish i could make things better
or just turn back the hands of time
back to when i felt so happy
a point where i could say she was mine

and if she told me tomorrow
that she wanted to be mine again
of course i'd take her back, because
i love her just like i did then

Newman
New Member

since 2008-04-10

Posts 5

1 posted 2008-04-10 03:45 PM

ive realised knows should be nose haha poor effort by me. can some1 tell me what the think though please.

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-04-10 06:40 PM

great first post and WELCOME to passions!! hopeing to read more

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-04-11 01:03 AM

ohh WOW!!!! Great first post i really really love it!!! Welcome to Passions! the flow was really good and the content.. sad but great!!!
Krysti

wisdomofthesword
Member

since 2007-12-17

Posts 224
the last place on earth

4 posted 2008-04-11 05:20 AM

the best poems come from the heart. nice

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

Newman
New Member

since 2008-04-10

Posts 5

5 posted 2008-04-11 05:24 AM

thanks for the replies. ive noticed another mistake though lol. .... 'she say it ' should be 'she saw it' . i should have read it after i wrote it i guess. learn from my mistakes

ShawtySheFly
Member

since 2007-12-19

Posts 71
In his Elevator (LOL)

6 posted 2008-04-11 11:33 AM

GREAT 1st post welcome to passions

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