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what i felt before things went wrong
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what i felt before things went wrong |
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Newman New Member
since 2008-04-10
Posts 5 |
You couldn’t be more perfect I’m so in love with you You say you feel the same I just really hope that’s true I don’t know how to show you How much you mean to me I want you more then anything Wish I could make you see You give me reason to smile You give me reason to breathe We could be perfect together Least that’s what I believe If only you were mine my princess I would give you the world Cos the only thing I want right now Is you to be my girl Your brown eyes they call out to me You’r lips scream to be kissed And now I’ve got these feelings That I didn’t know exist I'l l tell you now that you're the one Though I don't know what that\s worth To me my love ,you're everything My sun, my moon, my earth You couldn’t be more perfect I’m so in love with you You say you feel the same I just really hope that’s true im 19 , im not a great poet, i don' claim to be. i just want feedback on my work. |
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hiddensmiles Senior Member
since 2008-02-07
Posts 514at the beach... i wish |
very good write i like how you ended it the way you started it !! JJ |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I like this sooo sweet... Hope to read more soon Krysti |
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wisdomofthesword Member
since 2007-12-17
Posts 224the last place on earth |
good write mate, really like it I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so |
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ShawtySheFly Member
since 2007-12-19
Posts 71In his Elevator (LOL) |
good poem wow your pretty good being first here i lik your poetry keep it comin n fly I.>ROCK"my<Converse^cuz%i'm`RETRO*likeDAT |
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