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Teen Poetry #8

Victory

masksrlife
Member

since 2008-03-26

Posts 109
Canada

0 posted 2008-03-28 06:46 PM

We have the victory
to do what ever we want.
To love, hate, fear,
and care about others.
But I choose to hate.
Trust,
is no longer in my heart.
Love
has fled me at this younge age.
Care
has betrayed me along with many people.
I fear now of all these things
because of betrayal.
While the knifes peirce
my heart and soul.
This is why I chooose to hate.

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

1 posted 2008-03-28 08:43 PM

Oh bravo! This poem deserves a sequel!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

masksrlife
Member

since 2008-03-26

Posts 109
Canada

2 posted 2008-03-29 01:46 PM

THanx maybe there will be a add on yet not sure:P well yeah thanx again.

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

3 posted 2008-03-29 10:39 PM

nice write!!

Katarina
Junior Member

since 2008-03-10

Posts 15
AUSTRALIA, N.S.W

4 posted 2008-03-30 01:55 AM

NICE!!!

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

5 posted 2008-03-30 03:19 AM

An unusual topic, but a good one nevertheless. Your use of the word "victory" confused me, but it had enough impact for me to notice. (I have a very short attention span) I also agree with Earl, but I wonder what a sequel would be like. Thanks for posting!
-Andrew

Dawn gives birth to a new day.
Dusk lays it to rest.

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