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fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09
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0 posted 2008-03-14 11:57 AM



I was the bandit who crawled in through your eyes

I was the one wearing the black disguise

I misled you into a fantasy world

A world where I watched you happily & childishly twirl

I was the magician who made your pain disappear

And I’d take a bow when you would thank me in my ear

I was the clay you molded into what you always wanted

And the trophy that you thought only you on your arm flaunted

I was the lock on your diary that hung around while you vented

And the dictionary for the words that I thought were demented

I was your all

A true chameleon

But through it all

I realized you’re one in a million

Now I lay here in the darkness of my cell

Chanting apologies of your farewell

Trying to stay afloat from swallowing my tears

And unzipping my sheepskin coat that I have worn for many years

I am stuck in the alone that lasts an eternity

And the roach that’s trapped in the asylum of insanity

No sorry, no actions and no bleeding rivers

Will make you forgive who I was, just thinking back gives me shivers

I have lost the one treasure I loved the most

But will continue searching like a pirate lost in the coast

My love my soul my inner whole let it be known I am in purgatory  

A forgotten author from writing a messed up love story!



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Belinda
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since 2006-01-30
Posts 126
UK
1 posted 2008-04-19 07:03 PM


really good write.
had a really nice feel to it.

well done

Belinda ~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
Posts 514
at the beach... i wish
2 posted 2008-04-19 11:50 PM


Nice write

JJ

wisdomofthesword
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since 2007-12-17
Posts 224
the last place on earth
3 posted 2008-04-20 01:44 AM


very nice, good job

I don't care if you think I'm a fool but don't ever tell me so

Virtual Abyss
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since 2008-04-09
Posts 52
East Coast - USA
4 posted 2008-04-20 02:52 AM


Wow, whether all true, some truth, or not.  I felt it and almost took the feelings on as my own (relation). Awesome write!

V/r,

Virtual Abyss


justanotherstorm
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since 2007-10-24
Posts 321

5 posted 2008-04-20 04:08 AM


dang nice write it really got my attention
fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09
Posts 257

6 posted 2008-04-20 06:16 PM


thanks
Tripp'ncutie
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since 2008-05-05
Posts 73
minnasota
7 posted 2008-05-05 01:13 PM


wonderfully written. wow. i am, just wowed at all the stuff i have read today. considering i just signed up i am looking forward to recieving feed back on my work just as i have seen on almost every poem i have replied to or read.

Great work!!

brakeonthroo
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since 2008-04-30
Posts 4

8 posted 2008-05-05 01:33 PM


I loved it ... wow

I love the way you write.

imsimplyme
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since 2008-04-01
Posts 16
California
9 posted 2008-05-05 02:06 PM


oh wow, baically the most powerful thing i've ever read. i could feel the saddness in it. great poem  
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