Teen Poetry #8 |
This Is How You Save A Life!! (Written For A Struggling PIP Poet)!! |
RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
This poem is written for my special Lil Sister(Cyber One Of Course) Forever Broken.. A World so cold would shut you out.. but my arms are opening wider now so don't cry, don't pout.. Let me catch you!! ______________________________________________________ Put Down The Knife, This Is How You Save Life The world of destruction spins around and around The faster it gets, the harder she hits the ground Her heart beats faster as her blood starts to boil These emotions of hers will bury her in this soil She picks up the knife the blade sparkles in the sun If only it could all be over, if only she had a gun Cutting’s who she is, it’s what she knows best If she could only put it down, go to sleep, have a rest She stands back as her hands tremble in despair If only she knew that we really care She can rise above this, rise from the ashes of old Rise above those deadly voice that will soon be blunt and cold You know lil Em, i’ll pray for you tonight I just pray that you have the courage to stand up and fight So go on sweetie put down the knife Today will not be the day when you attempt to take your life |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
beautiful |
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XxForever.BrokenxX Senior Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 891Neverland |
... so im sitting here, trying my heardest no to cry 'cause my moms in the kitchen but the last stanza deffinetly did it. Jess, thank you. I-- I don't know what to say to u. I just know that I feel very much like crying..lol. which i haven't done for a while (well i did yesterday but whatever) so yeah, Thanx. I'll try my hardest for you. {~~*~~} {&}Love*liesOfBeauty~[NowColdInMyHand] {`~Emily~`} |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
I am crying over here. Best of luck Emily. This was a Beautiful, beautiful poem Jess. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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Jezzika Member
since 2005-01-05
Posts 154work |
"The world of destruction spins around and around The faster it gets, the harder she hits the ground Her heart beats faster as her blood starts to boil These emotions of hers will bury her in this soil" This was my favorite part! This poem was awesome and I can sadly relate to it more then I should... I hope everything works out great write!! One trillion dollars could buy a heart a soul ~ Anti-Flag |
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shattered-smiles Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 247inside the shadows |
It's really sweet that you wrote Em a poem Jess. Good write. [&] she's a blood broken rose |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
dude im crying too. you are such a great friend jess. and forever broken, you are so lucky for her girl. be strong, ull make it thru . only a vampire can love you forever. |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
hope things work out Em's! theres a whole bumch of people on PIP who care and hope for the best for you. i hope things get better!! and by the way great poem!!! ~Zach~ |
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shattered-smiles Member
since 2008-01-20
Posts 247inside the shadows |
Ya, you're lucky to have Jess, Em. No One Knew She Bled To Feel; To Remind Herself That She Was Real |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Thanks for the awesome comments guys.. love them all.. thankyou heaps and heaps.. Em, Stay strong girl.. |
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I am the arch angel Member
since 2008-02-02
Posts 167nowhere,illinois,USA |
wow....I'm touched. It means a lot for anybody to do something like this for somebody... i can't criticize you jess. your work is beautiful. i can't imagine what you go through just to put it all together....and emily..cutting doesnt solve anything but cause more problems....we've talked. and we've both went through this.... just forget a knife and and remember that your not alone.....just talk to me about it. i will listen.............. jess good good great! job keagan |
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starpower Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 82Utah |
Wow that was a great poem and I love the way you put the words together You can send me an email, |
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crimsonXnails Member
since 2008-02-10
Posts 108dark/little/heavan.:*:. |
hey hey, jess, thanx fer writing this poem. i know it means so much to em. !Tracey! if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying |
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