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Amic
Junior Member

since 2008-02-17

Posts 39
...I think Im lost again...

0 posted 2008-02-26 04:02 PM

You ignore everything I say
And twist so it works your way
You make it so that every day
I sit and wonder what
Will happen next with you
I can not understand your disbelief
Or figure out the constant
Battle raging between
You and me

I can not seem to find
A way to get the words
Through that I’m trying to say
You turn away and seem to see
Another world without me
I understand that this is hard
But we really need to go through this
Together we need to stand
We need to fight this not stay under his hand
You ignore everything I say
And twist so it works your way
You show me that you would rather believe
The liar you live with
Than me

You tell me of your love for me
And promise it is true
But when I tell you
Of the truth
You turn away and listen
To the man you say you love
But you tell me you are here for me
Are you even listening?
Why must you ignore everything I say?
Why must you twist it so that it works your way?

[This message has been edited by Amic (02-27-2008 10:39 AM).]

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2008-02-26 06:30 PM

i like it alot. but i think breaking it into stanzas wouldnt hurt.

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

2 posted 2008-02-26 11:22 PM

I love this poem! I'm forced to agree with CO however: breaking it into stanzas would be a very good thing.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2008-02-27 01:35 AM

OMG!!! this wuz really guud I loved it!!!!!!!! a lot!!! hehe
Krysti

Amic
Junior Member

since 2008-02-17

Posts 39
...I think Im lost again...

4 posted 2008-02-27 10:40 AM

Thanks.. I wasnt sure if the rhyme was ok since it only rhymes part of the time? I broke it into stanzas though!

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2008-02-27 09:44 PM

ouu Intense Title!

ARCTIC WIND

starpower
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 82
Utah

6 posted 2008-03-16 03:09 PM

Hey that was a great poem and I love the way that the words are puy together

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