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~frustrated writer~
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since 2008-02-25
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0 posted 2008-03-14 11:01 PM



we've been friends for four years
but never did i felt any strange feelings
until the floor plan came
it started to shiver my veins.
i've got a crush on you
you make me feel the way that i do.


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rebelangelv
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since 2007-05-28
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1 posted 2008-03-15 01:30 PM


hey this was really good, but i felt like u left me hangign. add some more!!!  o and btw WELCOME TO PIPTALK!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
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2 posted 2008-03-15 07:01 PM


I agree it was a good poem but I felt like there wasn't enough and some of the grammer was wrong so besides that it was very good
hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
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at the beach... i wish
3 posted 2008-03-15 07:04 PM


nice poem! but i also agree


~frustrated writer~
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4 posted 2008-03-16 06:05 AM


oh yeah, surf_painter you're right..

"but never did i felt any strange feelings"

this should be..

but never did i FEEL any strange feelings..


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