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Teen Poetry #8

a crush on you

~frustrated writer~
Member

since 2008-02-25

Posts 84

0 posted 2008-03-14 11:01 PM

we've been friends for four years
but never did i felt any strange feelings
until the floor plan came
it started to shiver my veins.
i've got a crush on you
you make me feel the way that i do.

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

1 posted 2008-03-15 01:30 PM

hey this was really good, but i felt like u left me hangign. add some more!!! o and btw WELCOME TO PIPTALK!

only a vampire can love you forever.
forbidden to remember, terrified to forget

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

2 posted 2008-03-15 07:01 PM

I agree it was a good poem but I felt like there wasn't enough and some of the grammer was wrong so besides that it was very good

hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

3 posted 2008-03-15 07:04 PM

nice poem! but i also agree

~frustrated writer~
Member

since 2008-02-25

Posts 84

4 posted 2008-03-16 06:05 AM

oh yeah, surf_painter you're right..

"but never did i felt any strange feelings"

this should be..

but never did i FEEL any strange feelings..

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