Breathe In And Breathe Out (It's Not Okay To Die Because Of Me)

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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2008-02-25 11:27 PM

Well Guys here's another poem with a strange title and its also a sequel too many of the poems I've written lately.. I guess it really isn't okay for somebody to hurt because of me. so here's my peace keeping work of art and its heartfelt. There's a message hidden and if you read deep enough and only a few will be able too you will find it.. So enjoy.. And I'd like to call a truce..
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Breathe In And Breathe Out(It's Not Okay To Die Because Of Me)

Scaffolded messages encrypted in blood
Each one holds the plea of a girl once loved
Quick give him a little nudge while she holds her breathe
He’ll fall from the buildings edge where he’ll tumble to his death

The cards and flowers by his bedside show of only hope
But a girl stands there crying, just how will she cope
You see a little while ago they had a huge fight
They broke each other’s heart’s trying to do what was right

She was over hurting and didn’t want to stick around
But instead of staying to claim her man, she buried him in the ground
She left him broken, lifeless and upset
She abused his trust and now she can’t forget

So as he dangles from the edge she’ll make her final plea
And she hopes that this final message will finally set him free
We all make mistakes and we fall down sometimes
But I’m not letting go of you, you’re not crossing that line

There’s a light your eyes that makes everything alright
So breathe in and breathe out, it’s okay to fight
So hold on and hold tight
Take my strength, make it through the night

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-02-26 02:31 AM

Wow hunn... amazing write.. left me speechless

Krysti

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2008-02-26 02:48 AM

Thanks Hunni.. Lets Hope It Good Enough...

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

3 posted 2008-02-26 10:14 AM

Beautiful! This is sooo good!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

Amic
Junior Member

since 2008-02-17

Posts 39
...I think Im lost again...

4 posted 2008-02-26 02:54 PM

This is amazing!! Wow....

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

5 posted 2008-02-26 03:47 PM

Wow! wow! wow! truly amazing!

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

6 posted 2008-02-26 06:19 PM

Fantasticly writen Jess. I know I say that alot but I mean it!! This is beautiful.

FoReVeRbRokEn

I am the arch angel
Member

since 2008-02-02

Posts 167
nowhere,illinois,USA

7 posted 2008-02-26 08:58 PM

hey jess haven't heard from you in a while.....how have you been? this is beautiful! I've yet to construct the hidden message....... keep writing i love what you do!

~-Keagan-~

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

8 posted 2008-02-27 09:41 PM

A write full of emotion I guess!

ARCTIC WIND

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