Her (Waiting) (Eastern Breeze)

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

0 posted 2008-02-21 01:38 AM

I cant get her out of my mind. I cant, I cant. Shes just a beauty. Full of suprises im to scared of. Are feet graze each other. Yet nothing comes out of my mouth. I'm to scared of letting her in Im to scared.

Ive been waiting for you my whole life and you too have been waiting. I think the time has come to let you in. You've been waiting patiently at the door. Knocking, but no one answered you. I dont think anyone feels the same way I do for you, but I've been waiting, and now,Im here.

We can take a shot at this. Can't we? Our Hearts might break and im not ready for a broke heart. So I think I'll close the door again. Waiting..... knowing I should open the door scared of everything. Unsure of my thoughts and actions

Go North into my heart and I'll go Souh to you....

Meeting at the middle. Afraid a wind from the East will blow us away from each other taking the chance.
Are feet graze each others. Yet nothing still comes out of my mouth. If nothing comes out, then we've been blown off course by an Eastern Breeze.
But when something does come out we've met at the middle of a rainbow from side to side. Can this work?
Only time will tell........

[This message has been edited by krad008 (02-21-2008 03:38 PM).]

Falling rain

Member Elite

since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

1 posted 2008-02-21 11:55 AM

aww this is really nice. i know how you feel. really i do know lol

. nice write but you got a spelling error though. when you said "hole" i think you ment "whole" lol. sorry if im being annoying by correcting your spelling but im a grammar nerd lmao!

Great write and welcome to PIP! I can't wait to see more of your work!

~Zach~

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

2 posted 2008-02-21 03:38 PM

lol thanks ill fix that. Its just nice to finally get to post some of the stuff I write in my journal.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

3 posted 2008-02-21 04:31 PM

She must Be something lol

ARCTIC WIND

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

4 posted 2008-02-21 05:12 PM

yea she really is

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2008-02-22 08:10 AM

I liked it and Know how that feels, but I wasn't sure about your structure and the long sentences instead of at each new sentence making it a new line?

krad008
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 82

6 posted 2008-02-22 08:11 PM

oh sorry if you didnt like that

Dark Star
Member

since 2008-02-20

Posts 392
Lost in your eyes

7 posted 2008-02-23 03:23 PM

liked it

xoxoxoxooxoxoxo- Star

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.