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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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0 posted 2008-02-18 05:08 PM



Coal and Ember

Eyes wide and staring straight
At the glowing screen ahead
Too tired to retract-
Or to go to bed

It’s a battle of the firmest
The most resistant child will win
But the prize- unsatisfactory
At best results are thin

She’s looking back, but too far gone
There’s nothing left for her
She’s waiting oh so patiently
For the past that must defer

And you can read intentions
Buried in her soul
Looking past reactions
You can see a black-like coal

It carries such an ember
As the world has never seen
A bitter cold and bluishness
That should have never been

She’s pulling fast away
Into the fire you will create
But she’s leaving all the answers
Up to good old fate


and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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Earl Robertson
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1 posted 2008-02-18 06:38 PM


I'm sorry your hurting Kate.
This was beautifuly written...a wonderful poem. Headed for the library.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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2 posted 2008-02-18 07:25 PM


acually i'm not really hurting- just confused and trying to figure out what i'm supposed to do with well, you know who. lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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3 posted 2008-02-18 07:37 PM


supprisenly im confused by this poem. i find that really weird cuz i understand most of your poems. can you please explain to me on whats its about?

~Zach~

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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4 posted 2008-02-18 07:48 PM


alright, i'll be honest, it's really complicated, it's also really simple. it's all symbolic and she needs to get away from this trap like love so she can be free for the real thing sorry i know that doesn't help but i tried.

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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5 posted 2008-02-18 08:22 PM


hmm after hearing your answer and re-reading it. it makes sence now. good job! and thanks for clearing it up for me.

~Zach~

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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6 posted 2008-02-18 08:26 PM


glad it makes sense to you b/c i'm still lost and i wrote the dang thing, lol.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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7 posted 2008-02-18 09:20 PM


haha i know how you feel some of the poems i write i dont understand really. i just write random words that seem to fit together and then after i try to find the meaning but sometimes i dont know what it is LOL

~Zach~

Earl Robertson
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8 posted 2008-02-18 09:37 PM


Sorry for complicating your life
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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9 posted 2008-02-19 05:36 PM


waht?!? you haven't complicated my life- oh no i do a fine job of it on my own, you have only uncomplicated it in fact.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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