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crimsonXnails
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0 posted 2008-02-16 10:54 PM


a farmer finds her
washed up corps
atop his barn, lying like
a blue stemed rose.
her hand hangs limp,
crimson red.

digging a grave
in the soaking grain feild,
the farmer clears
away the debris
and brings the girl.

she lies beneith the wet soil,
blue and red.
roots spring from her
crimson nails,
the final trace
of her best friend.

a new rose bush, now
grows in that field,
birthed from her
crimson nails,
and every day s girl
comes and cares for
her new best friend
while a storm
brews in the distance.

if you can touch me, i know i'm still only dying

© Copyright 2008 Tracey - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-02-17 08:13 AM


hmm idk about this poem. it could mean that you tryed too hard? to cling on to whats left of you. And you end up getting hurt and dyed.  But even though your dead. someone else takes your place (the other girl) and the storm is the problem or emotions...

Hopefully that can clear it up a little. Keep up the good writing!!!!

~Zach~

"Nice guys finish last"

Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
2 posted 2008-02-17 03:43 PM


Perhaps you feel like the you've switched places. Like you need help now, and are afriad of hurting others.
Again a beutifuly written peice!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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