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Teen Poetry #8

The Idiot Inside

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2008-02-12 10:31 PM

The Idiot Inside

I'm breathing deeply into a
bag of the
past,
as tears sail over aquatic
cheeks
only to pool against a dam
made of rubber.
I never should have opened my eyes.

wolf girl
Member

since 2007-12-03

Posts 150
washington, US

1 posted 2008-02-12 11:24 PM

i liked it but i dont quite understand abstract poetry. it has great flow.

-jenna

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

2 posted 2008-02-12 11:32 PM

I'm going to have to come back at this one when I'm more awake!
An exelent job Alex! I realy going to enjoy sorting through all my suspitions till I find one that makes sense. (that is AFTER I'm thinking coherently)
In my library you go...

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2008-02-13 11:20 AM

woah, i liked it, it was beautifully worded. nice man.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

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