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My Wolves
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My Wolves |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
This one has a hidden meaning; see if you can't get it! The wolves they howl in the woods Your poison on their fangs They fear the fire burning bright But not flickering candle light Those wolves they circle round my camp Your poison in their eyes Witch I should run from thee But I cannot find my legs to flee The wolves they howl in the woods You’re poison on their fangs The fire is steadily dimming My will steadily weakening The wolves they circle closer now You’re poison in my heart When the wolves tear out this heart I fear I’ll destroy you ere I depart "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
Holy crap . . . this was the best wow . . . I'm almost in tears over here earl. It's just so beautifully well done and the meanings I grasped! I'm shivering in my skin. I'm not good at guessing right at these things- so I shall let better men try. -Kate ps this just amazed me- it is truly just . . . incredible I just wow- I wish that what I'm feeling would translate into words, but there is just not a words for this profounity. and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
oh well done. This is actually one of my favorites that I've read on here, and I've been on here for a bit. I loved the steady turn throughout the poem. At first this woman is the one with the poison, but it consumes you and finally you are the destroyer. Freaking fantastic. (I don't toss compliments around either, so well done.) Alex |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Wow thank you! That means allot coming from you! But um, I'm curious Kate; what meaning(s) did you grasp in that to inspire such a reaction? (Maybe I missed them!) ps I think I know what feeling your talking about. I had the same thing writing it. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Thanks Alex again that means allot coming from you!  "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
it's yourself- not a she, but a he, wow, like you were trying to name her (ie the feeling) but it turned out that it was you. -Kate i know i knwo i'm wrong . . . but wow. and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
You're not to far off Kate...kind of. The wolves are my real enemies in this piece. They're my demons, my dark sides, which are always at the edge of my existance. "They fear the fire burning bright but not the flickring candle light" The "witch" on the other hand are other people in my life who, through no fault of their own empower the wolves or give them more routes to me. In a way they are me because I'm the one who allows them to do that. Lastly my greatest fear is that I will hurt others around me when (or if) I loose the fire and the light that now defines me. If I loose my ability to love. This poem was quite an uplifting, revealing write. It has a lot of me in it and can be tied to any number of "worst case senarios" in my life. (lol which I am trying to avoid) "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl "Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl (Yes I am crazy) [This message has been edited by Earl Robertson (02-12-2008 07:40 PM).] |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
oh earl, ahahaha looks like we're in the same boat- i'm just trying to keep my head above the water at this point, it looks liek you may be there as well. Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Yeah but after writing this I think (knock on wood) that I'm treading, not drowning. Best of luck to you, and if you want to talk more openly go ahead and email me. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
well done earl. i love your work because i can absorb my own meanings and then hear yours. well done again. |
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