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I was there Amanda
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I was there Amanda |
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internetsurfer New Member
since 2007-08-15
Posts 3CA,, USA |
I was there I was there to pull you off Johnny I was there to pull back your hair I was there to pull you up from the bathroom Flore I was there when you had no place to sleep I was there when you had no place to live I was there when you needed a ride to work I was there when you couldn't go to sleep I was there to lend you work pants I was there when you dint fill like driving to Cameron park I was there to give you food when you were hungry I was there calling you to make shore you got home ok. I was there when no one else was! I wanted to be I wanted to be there to sit around and watch cartoons and old movies with you I wanted to be there when you opened your Christmas present I wanted to be there to see how beautiful you are when you wake up I wanted to be there when u gave me a back scratch and my hole body would tense in a good way i wanted to be there as a boyfriend not just a friend i wanted to be there for you! |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
The name Amanda is so beautiful- one of my favorites, I have a few poems about a girl named amanda. I'm sure that if you showed this to her- it would touch Amanda -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
Not bad. except for a few spelling errors but otherwise very good |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Great poem. My suggestion: keep being their for her. Be the best friend she's ever had and when you think she's redy ask her out. Showing her the poem will have one of two affects 1) jumpstart your relationship; she sees in you what you see in her and she jumps at the chance you've given her OR 2) You scare her and she runs from you and you have to repair the friendship and start working up to it again. (Which would be hard work, siting back and letting her get her head around it.) Again be there as a friend and you'll see the look in her eyes that tells you it's time. Be patient, be strong,learn slow love. ps take my advise with a grain of salt; I'm still working at it. I haven't (and don't know if I want to) won yet. "Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Randy, this wuz such a great poem something about it just drew me in I loved it!! Krysti |
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