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Teen Poetry #8

Deep Freez Love

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

0 posted 2008-01-23 07:12 PM

Everything is warm and freezing
all around me. I don't feel the
pain I know is there. All is
black and bright, yet there is
no light that has found me.

I'm swimming through this strange
bright darkness, swimming with no
life. Nothing has a meaning anymore,
everything I addore. It all seems
so right, conserning what it used
to be. I think to myself I may have
found a key. A key to life,death and
darkness. Those are why I am here,
surrounded by everything that I
fear. Yet I don't fear them more
than I do life.

I am like the darkness in some cirten
way. I hide from others, but if they
find me the are stuck along untill
there dying day. It seems all so tragic
though you're getting the eddited
version. Everything I do and say belongs
to another person. I am only a character
in this life story you are reading,
no more real than love. For if love from
one person to the next was real we would
all be dead.

Love can be a powerful thing, sometimes
so powerful it can kill. Love, a dangerous
powerful death leading you know where but
to darkness.

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2008-01-23 10:40 PM

Love can be a powerful thing~~~

Wow Emily, how true.

Love... so deep and complex too
Great poem
Krysti

Earl Robertson
Senior Member

since 2008-01-21

Posts 753
BC, Canada

2 posted 2008-01-23 11:10 PM

So many intricate meanings...subtlty...hidden understanding...must spend hours unravaling!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

3 posted 2008-01-24 08:38 AM

Good write. I would only suggest one thing really. Go over your poetry with a spellcheck before you post them. There are not many serious changes to be done though. It has a great meaning. Love can be great one minute and then it can feel like your slipping into a dark black abyss the next minute.
TJ

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