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The Voices In Your Head
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The Voices In Your Head |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
it needs a little work...i was hoping someone would have some ideas? so that person sitting next to you on that cold, hard, dirty bus-stop bench might look like a normal high school kid on his way to school or an ordinary old lady on her way to a doctors office or a grocery store. But you don't know-you can't see inside their heads or read their thoughts. Maybe that high school kid is thinking along the same lines as you. Maybe that old lady is wishing she didn't have to deal with being old. Maybe they're both on their way to do the same thing you're planning to do Maybe their going to end it all as soon as they get off this bus- just like you. But you can't see inside their heads- you cant read their thoughts- maybe that old lady is not noticing you, but reciting her grocery list inside her head. maybe that high school kid is wondering where he put his math book. Or maybe that high school kid is your best friend that you forgot you knew maybe that old lady is your aunt. The voices are back again- telling you what to do- jump off the bridge, steal a knife find a gun and end it all- but that old lady is watching you- the high school kid is staring- you're talking to yourself again- and your guardian angels have found you. they won't let you die they won't let you be swallowed by the voices that are roaring in your head. Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
this was incredible. athe free flow was amazing. i really seems as though i was hearing voices in my head too as i read along. nice. |
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Earl Robertson Senior Member
since 2008-01-21
Posts 753BC, Canada |
Gulp, thanks for reminding me rebel (to self)There you happy she brought you back...no, no I'm not I absolutly refuse! Come on just leave me alone ok? No No somone help!! Seriously though that was a great poem. Realy got the old insanity back up! Yay!!! um...he he |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
lol...sorry earl...and thanks! Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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