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wolf girl
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since 2007-12-03
Posts 150
washington, US

0 posted 2008-01-07 05:45 PM


i wrote this one in spanish. i think it could use some work.
it hurts to look at you
everything ended so soon
it ended with a boom!

my life is a never ending quest
its boring at best
i fall much to easily

i fall for them but they dont fall for me
the pain runs so deep

then again im to blame
im put to shame

i let them in
i gave them the power to hurt
im nothing more to them than dirt

it is always my fault
im the reason for my pain
im to blame

if i stop getting attached
if i stop falling in love
maybe ill be ok
maybe ill stop causing my own pain

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joe86s
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since 2008-01-07
Posts 10

1 posted 2008-01-07 05:51 PM


i'm new to this, so i don't know what quite to post as far as comments--

but here goes

i definitely get what you're talking about. i felt like that a lot last (sophomore) year in college. but, in the end, i've really decided that it's nobody's fault--he's who he is, you're who you are, and he'd be at fault if he tried to pretend otherwise.

too often, guys will just 'say things' to make a girl smile or happy, not thinking about tomorrow, the day after, or the week after, when people get attached

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2008-01-08 12:11 PM


Wow I agree with Joe.... Lovely poem hunn
Krysti

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3 posted 2008-01-08 01:18 PM


wow this was really a nice poem I like the fact that many of us have felt like this and you described it to the T in this poem. nice write
XxForever.BrokenxX
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since 2008-01-20
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Neverland
4 posted 2008-01-22 08:46 PM


wow, u don't know how much that poem reminds me of one of my friends. It's amazing by the way so keep up the good work! it all seems to come naturally to u!!


Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
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5 posted 2008-01-22 09:15 PM


Very nice. One of my friends needs to see this (and will if I have anything to say about it!)

if i stop getting attached
if i stop falling in love
maybe ill be ok
maybe ill stop causing my own pain

I've felt like this, but then some of if I didn't get attached to people my life would be a whole lot worse than it is now...oops talking to myself again!

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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