Teen Poetry #8 |
Thorn in my Side |
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
Thorn in my Side How can you pretend That you know who I am Sure you come and listen But you don’t comprehend Your words are sharp and biting You claw under my skin You don’t want to hear me Speaking over again and again I never cut you Not the way you cut me I listen and help you But you don’t see That anything worth making Takes two to create When you’re not holding your end Our world suffocates Sister and friend, OH why don’t you care? Am I really so awful It’s not worth being there? You take down my fences Saying you really don’t mind That you’re there and you’re friendly (You’re the backstabbing kind) It’s hard to see hope When your sister’s a thorn I’m pulling you out And I won’t be forlorn and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
the last two stanza's I think are the best ones of the whole thing but it is a great poem and I thoroughly (I hope I spelt that right) enjoyed it |
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Jaki H Member
since 2008-01-19
Posts 232NJ, USA |
ooh, i like everything! id add one more syllable to the 2nd to last line, but thats just me. really good! |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Kate, Kate, Kate.. seriously if u keep blowing my socks of then i'm gunna need to go shopping.. maybe i should just learn to not wear any socks when i read ur work lol... No seriously u like blowing me away.. i read all your work sometimes i comment sometimes i don't but no matter what you always seem to create a wonderful piece that touches and inspires me.. Great Work, Jess |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
ohhh Kate Darlin' AMAZING everytime i read your work i think back to when you started you had such guud poetry then but now you are really really good. I love reading your poems hunn Krysti |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
Awwww thanks!!!!!!!!!!! And hey Jess, I'll go shopping with you- socks are on me! lol. And Krysti oh it's always so nice to hear your kind words. They really really helped today. -Kate and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night |
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