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Teen Poetry #8

broken fairytales.

Belinda
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since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

0 posted 2008-01-07 07:32 AM

you'll steal her dreams,
as you stole mine.
you'll diminish her hopes,
as you diminished mine.

you'll build up false trust,
like you did to me,
you'll cloud her vision,
so she can not see.

you'll make her feel secure,
hold her tight in your arms,
you'll promise her the world,
she'll fall for your charms.

but let's just say,
she broke the spell,
she tamed the beast,
would all be well?

for when she did,
what i could not,
i thought so hard,
i thought a lot.

I should be happy,
she made you see,
yet my only wish,
is it had been me.

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

1 posted 2008-01-07 10:06 AM

I LOVED this! It's so relatable, yet so easily understood. A simple message conveyed quite elegantly. Going in my library
Pen
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hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2008-01-08 12:09 PM

Wow Belinda absolutley amazing poem I loved it

Krysti

fromme2U
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since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

3 posted 2008-01-08 07:22 PM

great job!

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

4 posted 2008-01-08 08:08 PM

but let's just say,
she broke the spell,
she tamed the beast,
would all be well?

woah. belinda, you are amazing. i'm almost in tears it was so beautiful. oh there goes one *softly i laugh* beautiful beautiful.

-Kate

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

5 posted 2008-01-09 08:00 AM

very nice

PoetsPlay
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since 2007-12-22

Posts 56
California

6 posted 2008-01-14 09:09 PM

This is... WOW! Really good job and two thumbs up!

Alexandra

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