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Lonely Christmas. (I'm New To =])
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Lonely Christmas. (I'm New To =]) |
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LittleWillow Member
since 2007-12-27
Posts 54 |
Heylo, new. I have hundred of poems all over the place but none on the laptop. So here a quick one to show you what my writing like. Opinions would be great =] .x. Its been a lonely christmas without you. I'll think of a way to somehow forget what we do. All the thing we did and said, will they ever seep out of my head? How can i stand there and see you with someone else What do you expect me to do, as im still crazy in love with you? Sometimes things don't plan out the way we want them to But i gave you everything and i dont think i could ever give up on you. I could be everything you need. The blue when the sky turns to grey. The sun when it feels to go away. I want to cry, but i have no tears left. What does she have that i don't? What makes her your fantasty? She wont love you like i do. She wont hug you the way i do. She wont kiss your lips like paradise. Please dont say anything. I guess i'd rather not know. It only hearts and the tears will come so. I'll cry on my bed for a few nights Eating chocolate bars and crisps instead. Because you'll never know what you meant to me. & nothing i could say would change what you have decided. I think id rather let my mind wonder then have you tear me in two with the truthful words. So ill raise a glass here with my friends A toast to the past I think im finally moving on at last. |
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xbrokenxlullabyx Junior Member
since 2007-12-25
Posts 36NJ, U.S.A. |
I like the growth the character shows, how she is feeling helpless and alone at the begining wodnering what she will do without him and then by the end is moving on. love this. Susanna V. |
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wolf girl Member
since 2007-12-03
Posts 150washington, US |
this was a really good write. it had alot of passion. -jenna |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Great poem hunn.. And Welcome To passions  Krysti  |
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LittleWillow Member
since 2007-12-27
Posts 54 |
Thank you all v much =] xx That is exactly what i wanted to show.. the strength inside her growing.. Glad you picked up on that! =D xxx |
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