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Teen Poetry #8

first poem up- Hush Now

xbrokenxlullabyx
Junior Member

since 2007-12-25

Posts 36
NJ, U.S.A.

0 posted 2007-12-25 10:14 PM

Hi, I'm new to this site and want to get some feeback on a poem I'm working on (key words: working on! It isn't perfect by any means) I'd love your opinion. Talk to me on aim, I'd love to read your work that isn't on here: ZaNnY SaY WhAt

"Hush now
As I’m moving up and down
Tracing your muscles
As I’m mapping your image

Don’t make a sound

I’m pressing my story
Up against your body
You’re pulling the memories
Out through my eyes
I’m keeping my promise
I’m keeping this dream alive
Even if it’s just for tonight
I’m keeping this dream alive

Christmas lights dance
Across my skin
Thoughts of where we started
And where we’ve been
As the red lights
Sink in like sin
Thoughts of cheap hotels
-And holiday depression

But hush now
Please don’t make a sound

Lights swimming
Before my eyes
Every single breath
Is a strangled cry
In, and out
In, and Out
every memory a twisted lullaby
(in and out, in and out)
Tonight

You make me someone
I’m scared to see
I'm afraid to know
How I could be
I’m even more terrified
That you’ll see
This is not how we’re supposed to be

Please hush now
Baby, don’t make a sound
Please just lie with me
Please show me how you see
Be my mirror
-My broken mirror
Tonight"

Susanna V.