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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2006-10-01 03:05 PM

There’s always questions in my mind,
The “maybes” of what I left behind,
Or the fears of what I just might find,
When I look beyond the past.

Maybe one day I’ll be able to let go
Maybe I won’t have to prove my value, somebody will know,
Someday I won’t have to put on a show
For something that might not last.

Maybe I can avoid all the hurt and pain,
Avoid all the guys who just think it’s a game,
Maybe this time it can be my gain,
And I can forget about you.

Maybe I can find a love you can’t buy,
And not have to question if their love’s in good supply,
Or if tomorrow will be another goodbye,
Maybe I need something new.

But my heart holds back, my minds not enough,
To convince my heart that I have to be tough,
I don’t want to let go, you just mean too much,
I don’t want to let go.

I don’t want to have to go on living each day
wishing I could take back how things got this way,
cause I’m already all out of words to say.
I care more than I’ll let you know.

I might hide it from you, my heart puts up the fight,
I’m a storm, twisted and turned, but never shedding light
on who’s to say whether your brain or your heart is right?
Your narcoleptic love is tearing me apart.

Maybe you’d be surprised to see,
The love that grew inside of me,
After all this I still want to be,
The girl who has your heart.

AIM-beatufu1tragidy

Tell me what you think about being open, about being honest with yourself.

pip_man
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

1 posted 2006-10-01 03:53 PM

I am soooooooo glad to see another poem from you, I really missed your writing, but it was worth the wait because I loved this poem! And I can kind of relate to it...great write! Post more soon!

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace."
Jimi Hendrix

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-10-01 10:37 PM

This is absolutley my most favorite poem of yours lol.. this is beautiful.. keep it up..

going in mylibrary

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2006-10-01 10:47 PM

Maybe you’d be surprised to see,
The love that grew inside of me,
After all this I still want to be,
The girl who has your heart.

if i had to pick a fac stanza this would be it it had a nice flow... not one of my favorites by you although it could be the different style i noticed too... but overall good poem.
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-10-02 12:58 PM

"Maybe I won’t have to prove my value, somebody will know,
Someday I won’t have to put on a show"

I can't believe that I might've missed reading this poem, I am so glad I didn't!

I loved the part I put above becanse I can relate so well to those few lines. In fact lots of the lines in this poem I can relate too...

This one I would have to say would be my favorite poem by you. The start and end was perfect in this poem. I loved how the ending seemed to wrap it all up, leaving no loose ends.

Amazing job and thanks for sharing this marvelous piece!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

Brittany
Junior Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 32
Canada

5 posted 2006-10-02 09:34 PM

But my heart holds back, my minds not enough,
To convince my heart that I have to be tough,
I don’t want to let go, you just mean too much,
I don’t want to let go.

This was my favourite stanza, I'm not really sure why, but I can really realate to it and I love the way it flows and rolls off the tounge. I liked the whole poem, it was good, and I can really relate to what you're feeling, and I think a lot of other people can too. But even though it's a topic lots of people can relate to, it's still original. This is the first poem I've read by you, but I will be looking for more!

~Life Ain't Always Beautiful~

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

6 posted 2006-10-02 11:09 PM

"But my heart holds back, my minds not enough,
To convince my heart that I have to be tough,
I don’t want to let go, you just mean too much,
I don’t want to let go."

This was also my favorite stanza, I can just really relate to it a lot. Not my favorite write by you, but still great nonetheless (and I loved the title too!).

~Alli~

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