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WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

0 posted 2006-10-01 02:48 PM

You're sitting in the corner,
With your heart in those big baby blues.
You watch him wherever he goes,
Obviously yearning, from your head to your shoes.
You got all dressed up,
And now you're sexy, to everyone's surprise.
So why is it that you can't see,
That he won't look at you unless you open his eyes?

You've got to take a chance, and ask him to dance.
He's blind until you make him see,
And tonight, you'll make him look.
All you have to do is breathe deep,
And take a chance.

You just have to walk up to him,
I know it's not easy, but you've got to try.
What's the worst he can do?
He's not worth what it takes you to cry.
And I know you do, cry at night,
When you think no one can hear.
But that's neither here nor there,
And now you have to let go of the fear.

You've got to take a chance, and ask him to dance.
He's blind until you make him see,
And tonight you'll make him look.
All you have to do is breathe deep,
And take a chance.

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

1 posted 2006-10-01 03:37 PM

I really really loved this. I can't pick out my favorite part, I loved the whole thing. Def. going in my small library lol keep it up, can't wait to see more.

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hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-10-01 11:06 PM

You've got to take a chance, and ask him to dance.
He's blind until you make him see,
And tonight you'll make him look.
All you have to do is breathe deep,
And take a chance.

beautifully written...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-10-02 12:53 PM

Wow... It's been awhile since I've read very many of your poems but I'd have to say you haven't lost your abilities to write an eye catcher. It was an addicting sort of poem, the way it was worded made me want to read more and more just to see what was about to happen!

I loved the part hunnie picked but I would have to agree that I would be hard pressed to pick a favorite in this poem. I found the whole thing to be an enjoyable read and I hope to read more of your work soon

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2006-10-02 10:58 PM

"You just have to walk up to him,
I know it's not easy, but you've got to try.
All you have to do is breathe deep,
And take a chance."

I know I kind of meshed two different parts of the poem together there, but they're my favorite lines. I love this poem so much, I can really relate to the whole idea of being scared to walk up to a guy, you did a superb job with this one.

Going into my library for sure!

~Alli~

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

5 posted 2006-10-03 11:19 AM

i am like, in LOVE with the last part!!! = )
its so beautifully written, not that the rest isn't, its just the end stood out to me...it tied it up nicely. = D

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