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wolf girl
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since 2007-12-03
Posts 150
washington, US

0 posted 2007-12-12 09:32 PM


i asked for help and here is the new version. hope you like it.

i sit here staring at you
i know i dont have a chance with you
your so goregeous and unique
you are just what i seek
your older than me but just by a little
i laugh at your silly smile
i wish you would notice me
myabe you do but i dont impress you
i know im not dazzling but i shouldnt have to be
you should get to know me then you will see

you will see how happy i can be
you will see so much you never knew
you will see what we really can be
you will see the real me!

© Copyright 2007 Jenna - All Rights Reserved
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
1 posted 2007-12-12 09:38 PM


Enjoyed ALOT!



ARCTIC WIND

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
2 posted 2007-12-13 03:29 PM


umm you impressed the artic winds, he never puts "alot!" at the end of his "enjoyed" lol. it was improved.

-Kate


"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

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