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Teen Poetry #8

what are you

nick_lyss
Member

since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

0 posted 2006-09-05 12:00 PM

what are you

  to me you are just this man who’s self-centered and who  runs from their child.
with no surprised you don’t show affection.
Who has so much bitterness inside that he fakes that he loves us.
you think you can just walk into my life without  me having any hatred  for you
Well I can because I don’t have a reason to show any affection for someone who doesn’t love
Me .

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-09-05 09:51 AM

Hi nick_lyss,

Powerful poem! Lots of emotions in this one, and, well, I'd like to say bitterness? I liked it though; it made sense. It is an interesting read. Although, I can not personally relate to the poem I loved it.

The only line I didn't really understand would be the second, can you please explain it?

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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hiddensmiles
Senior Member

since 2008-02-07

Posts 514
at the beach... i wish

2 posted 2008-02-23 07:21 PM

this is deep...nice write

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

3 posted 2008-02-23 08:06 PM

Nice job, I know how you feel.

FoReVeRbRokEn

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2008-02-24 11:01 AM

Enjoyed your thoughts!

ARCTIC WIND

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