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Elias Nevermore
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since 2007-11-03
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0 posted 2007-12-05 12:54 PM



One word
One heart
One soul

We are united
We are strong
We are one

Never shall we die, until this war is done
We shall never halt our conqeust, for we are one.

© Copyright 2007 Author Andrew E.L. - All Rights Reserved
Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
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that So Cal
1 posted 2007-12-05 03:28 AM


I liked the passion in this poem, but the idea it conveyed sounded like someone was about to take over. Don't get me wrong, I understand what you're talking about, but the wording of the last stanza was kind of strange.

Interesting topic, nevertheless.
-Andrew

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love <3
2 posted 2007-12-05 05:31 AM


this, this i did like. the last part especially.

-Kate


"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

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