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Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal

0 posted 2007-11-28 01:11 AM



Poor, poor me,
adrift at sea,
alone without an anchor.

I still holdfast,
to a broken mast,
split by heavy rancor.

I can not sing,
Nor will I cling,
To an empty melody.

I leave the dance,
not a backwards glance,
at that circle of amity.

Cast away,
I've lost my way,
traversing this empty path.

Alone I grumble,
as I stumble,
for lack of proper lath.

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

© Copyright 2007 Andrew - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-11-28 01:15 AM


Wow I loved this a lot..
Krysti

surf_painter
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2 posted 2007-11-28 09:51 AM


Wow this was a most amazing poem and I liked it alot, it was just well written
jbal892
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3 posted 2007-11-28 05:57 PM


Yea i really liked it too.  I like the rhyming scheme you used, haven't seen many poems written like that.
Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
4 posted 2007-12-03 11:46 PM


Hmm... I haven't read this in a while... I've been thinking lately, and I've realized that nothing really holds me down. It got me thinking more, and I realized I needed an anchor. And thus this poem was born!

Lol... Who am I kidding? I got lucky.

fromme2U
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5 posted 2007-12-07 12:34 PM


I love reading your poems and I love your sense of humor.
*CaT*
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6 posted 2007-12-07 01:19 PM


This is such a great poem. I love :
adrift at sea,
alone without an anchor
It's meaningful on so many levels

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