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HoW_cOuLd_YoU_LeAvE_mE
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since 2007-12-02

Posts 4
Georgia

0 posted 2007-12-02 09:11 PM

The key to my Heart

You told me that you loved me
As you softly kissed my lips
You said you’d never leave me
As you held me to your chest

You made me feel so special
Each time I talked to you
I thought I was the only one
When you reached for my hand

But when the walls fell away
All your lies were suddenly laid bare
And I could see right through your game
The one you’d played with every girl before me

I asked if it was just physical
And you answered with oh I’m all talk
I should have realized than
That you meant it in more ways than one

Of all the times I heard I love you
I don’t think you meant it once
I thought what we had was special
But I was just a trophy to you

The way I fit perfectly in your embrace
The way your hand always found mine
The sweet taste of your lips
Your arms around my waist

It all felt so good and right
Was it really all a lie?
But even before the question is formed
I know that I am right

So I try to move on
But your memory haunts my dreams
I cannot close my eyes
Because your face stands out in my mind

Such a short time together
But I love you all the same
I don’t know why I can’t let go
But you’ve taken hold of my heart

It’s tied up and bound
By chains so thick
I cannot break free
For you hold the key

But you must have misplaced it
Or you threw it away
Do you really know nothing?
Of the power you hold in your hands?

Do you have any power over her
Or do you just like breaking hearts
I hate her so much
Because she has everything we might have been

Things change you said
But what you really mean
Is you couldn’t satisfy me
You weren’t pretty enough

But I’m still waiting
If you ever learn
If you decide that you’re missing
What we once shared

I won’t ever stop loving you
But eventually we all must move on
Today is that day
I try to put your memory away

So here is the chance
To use your key
To unlock my heart
And come running back to me

This angel has fallen
Her white wings went black
She is falling....
From heaven to hell
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Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

1 posted 2007-12-02 10:42 PM

I liked the rythym of this piece. Although it akward in some parts, it made sense as I kept reading. Keep it up. Hope you feel better.

And welcome to Passions!

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

sexykitten15
Junior Member

since 2007-07-22

Posts 34

2 posted 2007-12-03 06:35 PM

Dont guys suck!
I hate them all they want to do is use you and then leave you to rot in pitiful misory!

I HATE it lol.

sorry. i loved this i could feel every emotion that you felt as you wrote this!

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2007-12-03 06:42 PM

this was truely incerible. i loved loved loved it.

these were my favorite lines.

So I try to move on
But your memory haunts my dreams
I cannot close my eyes
Because your face stands out in my mind

-Kate

"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2007-12-04 01:02 AM

I agree with Kitten guys suck...

as for this line
~Because she has everything we might have been~
She might have everything you could have been but how long do you think she is going to have that? I bet not for long... A spirit like him (well what i saw in the poem) Wont be tied down for long..Welcome to passions it is good to have you here

Krysti

Romantic
Junior Member

since 2007-12-10

Posts 28
Lost in the eyes of the one i love

5 posted 2007-12-11 12:54 PM

Just so you to know not all guys suck... i'm a guy, in love and treating my love with all respect and love that she deservers and then some...

i really like you poem... it's very beautiful and i can tell that it comes from your heart.

Love... it is the best feeling in the world... but beware.. the path to happyness can hurt alot

Determined
Junior Member

since 2007-12-10

Posts 14
Canada

6 posted 2007-12-11 06:24 AM

This is a good write, and as for the "all guys suck" thing going on here. Not so much. I'm a girl, but some of my best friends are guys, and I wouldn't trade 'em for the world.

Anyway, good write.

Determined
I'm Determined

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