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Teen Poetry #8

Awake Is The New Asleep

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-12-01 12:16 PM

You’ve always tried to break me
Watch me crumble watch me fall
Waiting for the perfect moment
The moment I hit the wall

Today I finally fell
Fell deep into your trap
I sat there and cried
While you fed me more crap

Hello, Madam Make Believe
You’re a compulsive liar
Another reason for me to hate you
To through your memories in the fire

Another day has dawned
A new lie now exposed
Awake is now the new asleep
As your whole life erodes

Fall a little harder
Run a little faster
Because next time you tell me lies
I’ll make your life a disaster

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2007-12-01 04:27 PM

it was very interesting, i liked it, but you spelled "throw" wrong, you spelt it as "though", but aside from that, very very nice Jess, very nice.

-kate

"I have no other but a woman's reason:
I think him so, because I think him so."

jbal892
Member

since 2007-11-25

Posts 58

2 posted 2007-12-02 12:57 PM

I really liked it! And I noticed your username kind of goes with the theme of poem lol

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-12-02 01:57 AM

Wow Jess, amazing poem..
Krysti

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2007-12-11 03:41 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

Romantic
Junior Member

since 2007-12-10

Posts 28
Lost in the eyes of the one i love

5 posted 2007-12-11 04:13 PM

very good... i really enjoyed reading this... it came from your heart and went straight into mine... good job

Love... it is the best feeling in the world... but beware.. the path to happyness can hurt alot

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