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Assassin_of_Verse
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since 2007-10-23
Posts 330
that So Cal

0 posted 2007-11-24 01:55 AM



A storm broods in my heart,
Tearing, turning my blood
Hot. crimson tears flow through
These veins, churning, changing
Into
what I'm not.

The squal breaks,
Freeing feelings felt
Least. in a rain bleached red, I see
And
Feel
A beast.

A howl of fury
Escapes, clawing through
My mind. A blur, just a fever.
Blind


I was emotionally high (or low) when I wrote this. It may seem out of place, but if you read carefully, and disregard some of the punctuation, you'll see the pattern.


As assassin shouldn't fall in love.
-The lovestruck assassin

[This message has been edited by Assassin_of_Verse (11-24-2007 10:35 PM).]

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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
1 posted 2007-11-24 05:25 PM


I found this very enjoyable. Although there were some spots i wasn't sure what was happening...i very much like this. Nicely written

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Leanne <3
Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia
2 posted 2007-11-26 07:38 PM


this one really got my attention and i loved reading it, i got a little lost at times but that its into the topic of the poem aswell.  great write.
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2007-12-10 04:12 PM


Enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

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