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Sarka
Junior Member

since 2006-09-21

Posts 23
Canada

0 posted 2006-09-29 10:40 AM

I dremt of you last night
and woke up up in a sweat
what an awful fright
my soul you'll never get

you have taken my heart
and tore it in two
I should have known from the start
that's something that you'd do

I was warned about it
I just didn't want to believe
now alone I sit
and see how I was deceived

You've taken all my trust
I'll never be the same
having to re learn I must
before I go insane

I don't hate you
for what you've done
Thank you for the lesson
next time I'll run

~If we didn't have any bad days, we wouldn't appreciate the good ones~

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

1 posted 2006-09-29 11:16 AM

Some thing that I really understand. I've been there before and it's not fun.

The words came together beautifully and I was swept into the poem.

Very Good!

Hugs and Hershey bars!

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-09-29 03:24 PM

was one of your best i think Loved it

...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

pencil&paper
Member

since 2006-09-09

Posts 76
asleep somewhere in my head

3 posted 2006-09-29 07:42 PM

great poem i really liked it
it made alot of since

"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-09-30 01:11 AM

"I don't hate you
for what you've done
Thank you for the lesson
next time I'll run"

I loved this part of the poem. For me this part is like saying "Yes, you've done wrong but I forgive you cause I can learn something from this", I could be wrong in my assumptions but it's the feeling I got from reading this poem.

It was an enjoyable read and I hope that I shall see more in the near future, thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

5 posted 2006-09-30 06:21 PM

"I don't hate you
for what you've done
Thank you for the lesson
next time I'll run"

I too loved this ending. Instead of hating them you're learning from the experience of it so you know better for next time.
Nice job with the poem.

~Alli~

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