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Teen Poetry #8

Can't Let Go

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2007-11-14 07:44 PM

This is one of my more recent writes. And i'm still a little rusty. So please, tell me your thoughts.

This mask has become a part of me,
For months I have hid this pain.
Pretending that it doesn’t hurt,
And adding to my shame;

Ignoring what’s inside of me,
Saying that I’ve moved on.
As if the times that I’ve been through
Can somehow just be gone.

Living every night and day,
With fake happiness and smiles.
Trying to bury all the ties,
To force pain away for a while.

But last night when I saw you’re grave,
For the first time since your death;
My heart stopped for a moment,
And I had to catch my breath…

Even after all this time,
My tears began to flow.
And suddenly it hit me,
That I still can’t let you go.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

prettypinkrebel
Member

since 2007-11-07

Posts 104

1 posted 2007-11-14 08:40 PM

I defintely know how this feels i just did this w/ my BEST friend. IT hurts so much !! I am SO sorry you have to go throught this pain too, I will be here if u need me
LOVE
adreanna Leigh

Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks!

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

2 posted 2007-11-14 09:30 PM

ummm, this theme of on going death in the teen department intrigues and worries me. Prehapps I shall tell you all of the one death I have ever truely known. yes prehaps i might

as for this, it was beautifully written. loved the lyrics, but oh how sad.

-Kate

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2007-11-14 09:57 PM

yes it is painful. things get better though. i would suggest that you try to stretch yourself by trying some more imagery or perhaps metaphor. good effort though

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