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Teen Poetry #8

Wanna See The Real Me... Come On I'll Hook You Up!!!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-11-04 06:31 AM

Take a look at me
Do you like what you see?
Broken dreams and a broken laugh
A dull future, a blood stained past

Skimpy little underwear and a lacy bra
Take a look closer, I aint going very far
Corrupted innocence and a tear stained face
Emotionally blackmailed because I’m mental case

If you like what you see, join the end of the line
It aint very long but I’m sure you’ll be fine
Sit on the bed I wont be long
It’ll be okay when I change the song

Now I awake from the nightmare once more
I was a hooker again hell at least she scores
So I stand up and take another look at me
The mirror cracks again and I don’t like what I see

So I straighten up the halo and screw it in to place
Just another day where I hate looking at my face

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

1 posted 2007-11-04 11:48 AM

well done. i am pleased by this. very.

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

2 posted 2007-11-04 12:52 PM

Holy......that was powerful!!!!!!!!!!!!

rebelangelv
Senior Member

since 2007-05-28

Posts 538
usa

3 posted 2007-11-04 02:52 PM

wow that was awsommmmme dude! cant w8 to c more

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

4 posted 2007-11-04 03:38 PM

jess...your so amazing, and i really just think you need to be my girl next door, so go ahead and move halfway round the world...lol

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

5 posted 2007-11-04 06:00 PM

Aww Thanks Guys... Hang On C.O I'll Just Lift My Skirt N Jump Through The monitor.... lol

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

6 posted 2007-11-05 12:56 PM

im with moon, that sure was powerful!!
i honestly dont know how you do it, you always seem to write such great pieces!!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

7 posted 2007-11-05 01:20 AM

Aww thankyou very much leanne.. its comments like that, that make me want to write more..

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

8 posted 2007-11-06 01:34 AM

Wow Jess you are amazing, it was really powerful I have to agree with Moon and Leanne on that. Am definately looking to read more

Krysti

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2007-11-12 10:08 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

rebel~angel
Member

since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

10 posted 2007-11-17 10:35 AM

wow...that was amazing...

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

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