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Teen Poetry #8

Sandman

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

0 posted 2007-11-03 10:38 AM

Twitching
From my last high
Falling
From my last lie
Please save me
What a wreck
I must be
Lost my mirror
Yesterday
Cut my hair
Today
Puzzle pieces
Sands of time
The shards of glass
Cutting edges
Of my thigh
Twitching
From my last high
Falling
From my last lie
It hits me
One last time
I'll close my eyes

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-11-03 08:02 PM

wow I really loved the emotion put into this one surf

Krysti

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2007-11-03 10:29 PM

i really like the way you write. its simple. simplicity is underrated. well done.

Alaina
Member

since 2007-06-16

Posts 106

3 posted 2007-11-03 11:10 PM

your poetry has such great flow, i loved this one

I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

4 posted 2007-11-04 03:40 PM

interesting piece. i was gripped by the flow. very nice.

i have to give the credit where its due, and i must say it would go to you.

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

5 posted 2007-11-05 12:54 PM

you can really see the emotion behind this poem and i really enjoyed reading it.

good write.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-11-12 10:06 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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