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Give Up On Cutting
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Give Up On Cutting |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
The first cut is the deepest You do it not knowing how it will feel But you will soon find out The pain is actually real The blood runs out And the scars start to appear But you only dig deeper With a mixture of red, sweat, and tears The next few times you pierce the scars Never letting them heal You think it's the only way For someone like you to deal The knife is placed at your skin Hoping that it won't hurt It's dug in deep You watch the scars being burnt The blood runs out As you hold the searing cut U know u did the wrong thing U can feel it in your gut But it's too late now What's done is done So you keep on cutting U can't leave only one This isn't the road you need take Sweetie you're only thirteen And here you are cutting yourself And hiding the scars so they can't be seen Your arm is all jacked up I can hardly see your skin Don't you know by now That this isn't the way to win? It hurts to see you like this Please don't do it anymore I can't help but feel troubled Cause I've been here before I know the pain is too much to bear And people don't always see And your family doesn't always care But sweetie there's always little me I know that it feels really good But it will only remind you of your pain Because the cuts may soon heal But the scars will always remain Aren't you tired Of carrying all this anger? Your veins are now weak And your life's in danger If suicide is a cry for help Then cutting is only a whine So try to get some help now Don't let the world be so blind You can show people that you're hurting It doesn't have to be concealed It would make a better place If all the troubles of the world were revealed And who knows It might be able to be solved Would that be nice to have All your pain resolved? So just roll down your sleeve And move on in life Give up on your bad habit And forget about this strife! |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
yes ppls i know i did steal a line in here from another user that titled their poem "suicide angel" but i really liked it and i couldnt think of anything else to say so sry!!!! |
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Alaina Member
since 2007-06-16
Posts 106 |
i think if you do actually know somebody with this kind of problem, showing them this poem might help...just a suggestion though i don't know if this is just a story or if it's something actually going on in your life. not to sound harsh or anything (i'm really sorry if this comes out sounding mean) but i've been through situations like this many times and i know that it can get REALLY dark, i'm just not sure you really captured the emotion in it. maybe it's because i've been through this on both sides of the story that i feel this way but this is just what I thought. again, i'm really sorry if that sounded mean, it wasn't my intention I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine? |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
yes it is actually something going on in my life...in fact i know a heck of a lot of ppl who struggle with this including me a while ago. so i know what u mean by it not being as deep as it actually was. i appreciate the comment tho. i have actually tried to post some of the darker ones ive written but 2 outta the three times ive tried they cancel it saying its not appropriate or sumthin. but yea so i thought id go a little lighter this time....it aint my best but i think it came out alright. |
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Alaina Member
since 2007-06-16
Posts 106 |
oh ok i understand...and yeah i know what you mean with them taking the poems off, that's happened to me too. i still think it was a great poem, that was just my first impression of it. I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine? |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
o really? i should check out some of ur stuff. u sound like a good writer  |
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voice2bheard Senior Member
since 2007-10-19
Posts 591New York |
Your poem is really great reminds me of myself a bit actually or at least how i used to be., but amazing!!! |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
wow theres so many teens that cut themselves i mean most of them dont have no good reason for doing it but sometimes it lets out their pain or makes them feel alive well good poem |
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Verg Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 52Colorado |
Never cut before but i know someone who has so the poem was great. |
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nevermore93 Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 73 |
great poem. inspiring. btw: pls check out my poem "resurrected" in thi forum |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
voice2beheard: im so sry u had to go thru it too. its horrible. but its great to hear that ur moving on. im still struggling with it myself but ive been doing good. if u ever need to talk im here |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
justanotherstorm: yes there are many many ppl who cut themselves now a days...personally i think most do it cuz its wut everyone else is doing it. some actually have good reasons to but yea its horrible |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
yep it is and stupid to tho i shouldnt be talkin |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
verg: thanx and just keeping encouraging ur friend that u love them and to stop |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
nevermore93: thanx! i will definately do so |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
y uve done it too. |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
yeah |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Hey.. I guess i should be pleased u liked my work enough to pull it apart n use it in ur own way... Hmmm okay.. anyway stay safe |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
justanotherstorm: that really sucks hopefully ur not still doing it tho. if u ever to talk im here revengeismine: im sorrrrry!!!!!!!!!!!! yes i did love ur work! i hope u dont mind that much but yea i had it in my mind and sorta used it. |
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justanotherstorm Member
since 2007-10-24
Posts 321 |
yeah thanks |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
ur welcome ur welcome |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
I LOVE THIS!! I am struggling with the same problem and have for the past 3 yrs on and off. i know exactall what u mean && thanks!! Going in my library |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
oo like the skull n e ways yea i know its hard a lot. in fact i just slipped up like last sat. but im just grateful i have a friend to hold me accountable for it so yea. thanx again! If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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rebelangelv Senior Member
since 2007-05-28
Posts 538usa |
wut did u like about it tho artic wind If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you" |
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