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rebelangelv
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0 posted 2007-10-25 10:09 PM



The first cut is the deepest
You do it not knowing how it will feel
But you will soon find out
The pain is actually real

The blood runs out
And the scars start to appear
But you only dig deeper
With a mixture of red, sweat, and tears

The next few times you pierce the scars
Never letting them heal
You think it's the only way
For someone like you to deal

The knife is placed at your skin
Hoping that it won't hurt
It's dug in deep
You watch the scars being burnt

The blood runs out
As you hold the searing cut
U know u did the wrong thing
U can feel it in your gut

But it's too late now
What's done is done
So you keep on cutting
U can't leave only one

This isn't the road you need take
Sweetie you're only thirteen
And here you are cutting yourself
And hiding the scars so they can't be seen

Your arm is all jacked up
I can hardly see your skin
Don't you know by now
That this isn't the way to win?

It hurts to see you like this
Please don't do it anymore
I can't help but feel troubled
Cause I've been here before

I know the pain is too much to bear
And people don't always see
And your family doesn't always care
But sweetie there's always little me

I know that it feels really good
But it will only remind you of your pain
Because the cuts may soon heal
But the scars will always remain

Aren't you tired
Of carrying all this anger?
Your veins are now weak
And your life's in danger

If suicide is a cry for help
Then cutting is only a whine
So try to get some help now
Don't let the world be so blind

You can show people that you're hurting
It doesn't have to be concealed
It would make a better place
If all the troubles of the world were revealed

And who knows
It might be able to be solved
Would that be nice to have
All your pain resolved?

So just roll down your sleeve
And move on in life
Give up on your bad habit
And forget about this strife!


© Copyright 2007 leah nelson - All Rights Reserved
rebelangelv
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1 posted 2007-10-25 10:12 PM


yes ppls i know i did steal a line in here from another user that titled their poem "suicide angel" but i really liked it and i couldnt think of anything else to say so sry!!!!
Alaina
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2 posted 2007-10-25 10:22 PM


i think if you do actually know somebody with this kind of problem, showing them this poem might help...just a suggestion though i don't know if this is just a story or if it's something actually going on in your life.
not to sound harsh or anything (i'm really sorry if this comes out sounding mean) but i've been through situations like this many times and i know that it can get REALLY dark, i'm just not sure you really captured the emotion in it. maybe it's because i've been through this on both sides of the story that i feel this way but this is just what I thought. again, i'm really sorry if that sounded mean, it wasn't my intention

I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

rebelangelv
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3 posted 2007-10-25 10:34 PM


yes it is actually something going on in my life...in fact i know a heck of a lot of ppl who struggle with this including me a while ago. so i know what u mean by it not being as deep as it actually was. i appreciate the comment tho. i have actually tried to post some of the darker ones ive written but 2 outta the three times ive tried they cancel it saying its not appropriate or sumthin. but yea so i thought id go a little lighter this time....it aint my best but i think it came out alright.
Alaina
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4 posted 2007-10-25 10:38 PM


oh ok i understand...and yeah i know what you mean with them taking the poems off, that's happened to me too. i still think it was a great poem, that was just my first impression of it.

I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

rebelangelv
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5 posted 2007-10-25 10:42 PM


o really?
i should check out some of ur stuff. u sound like a good writer

voice2bheard
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6 posted 2007-10-26 06:13 PM


Your poem is really great reminds me of myself a bit actually or at least how i used to be., but amazing!!!
justanotherstorm
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7 posted 2007-10-26 07:08 PM


wow theres so many teens that cut themselves i mean most of them dont have no good reason for doing it but sometimes it lets out their pain or makes them feel alive well good poem
Verg
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8 posted 2007-10-26 07:32 PM


Never cut before but i know someone who has so the poem was great.
nevermore93
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9 posted 2007-10-26 08:16 PM


great poem. inspiring.

btw: pls check out my poem "resurrected" in thi forum

rebelangelv
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10 posted 2007-10-26 09:23 PM


voice2beheard: im so sry u had to go thru it too. its horrible. but its great to hear that ur moving on. im still struggling with it myself but ive been doing good. if u ever need to talk im here
rebelangelv
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11 posted 2007-10-26 09:33 PM


justanotherstorm:
yes there are many many ppl who cut themselves now a days...personally i think most do it cuz its wut everyone else is doing it. some actually have good reasons to but yea its horrible

justanotherstorm
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12 posted 2007-10-26 09:34 PM


yep it is and stupid to tho i shouldnt be talkin
rebelangelv
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13 posted 2007-10-26 09:34 PM


verg: thanx and just keeping encouraging ur friend that u love them and to stop
rebelangelv
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14 posted 2007-10-26 09:36 PM


nevermore93: thanx! i will definately do so
rebelangelv
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15 posted 2007-10-26 09:40 PM


y uve done it too.
justanotherstorm
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16 posted 2007-10-27 01:39 AM


yeah
RevengeIsMine
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17 posted 2007-10-27 04:33 AM


Hey.. I guess i should be pleased u liked my work enough to pull it apart n use it in ur own way... Hmmm okay.. anyway stay safe
rebelangelv
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18 posted 2007-10-27 12:25 PM


justanotherstorm: that really sucks hopefully ur not still doing it tho. if u ever to talk im here

revengeismine: im sorrrrry!!!!!!!!!!!! yes i did love ur work! i hope u dont mind that much but yea i had it in my mind and sorta used it.

justanotherstorm
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19 posted 2007-10-27 05:43 PM


yeah thanks
rebelangelv
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20 posted 2007-10-27 07:02 PM


ur welcome ur welcome
prettypinkrebel
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21 posted 2007-11-09 07:29 AM


I LOVE THIS!! I am struggling with the same problem and have for the past 3 yrs on and off. i know exactall what u mean && thanks!!
Going in my library

rebelangelv
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22 posted 2007-11-09 06:52 PM


oo like the skull n e ways yea i know its hard a lot. in fact i just slipped up like last sat. but im just grateful i have a friend to hold me accountable for it so yea. thanx again!

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

Artic Wind
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23 posted 2007-11-12 10:13 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

rebelangelv
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24 posted 2007-11-14 01:00 AM


wut did u like about it tho artic wind

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

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