Teen Poetry #8 |
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Broken Tears, Broken Smiles, Broken Words, Corrupted Files |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia ![]() |
Broken Tears, Broken Smiles, Broken Words, Corrupted Files I guess your happy now That my tears have smudged this ink My eye is still throbbing Its turned black from shades of pink The tears are still falling And I don’t know how to make them stop I need the kiss of death And to the ground I wish to drop I wish this was all a dream And that soon I shall awake I guess I really couldn’t have it all And this is the icing on the cake You say he didn’t need to start it That my brother caused this all The truth is that your lying It was you that made this hell Don’t bother saying that you love me Because I’ve heard it all before You still keep on saying it But hell it only happens more Now you lying on the ground Passed out from all this mess N heres everyone telling me its my fault You just shouldn’t have done that Jess I guess the truth is that I hate myself For every little thing I’ve done But I can’t live this life anymore Because it’s bringing me undone Bitter tears will haunt my past And they will be forever falling And I know this black eye will stay awhile But I’m certain it wont last Today you lost your daughter You buried her alive You drowned me in a pool of insults And I couldn’t be revived You can sling your insults And I’ll try my best not to cry You can throw your punches And I’ll try my best to die… Not my best work but emotional |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
wow i liked it. pian is definalty the thrid (this is my personal opinion) strongest emotion, then comes hate in second, and love in first. love overpowers hate, and hate can over shadow grief. i thought this was very relatable. i loved it, library. -Kate "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow Jess you really nailed this I liked it... and I hope everything works out for the best. That things will get better for you. Best Wishes, Krysti |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
this was amazing and hurting at the same time. a beutiful tragidy written in emotion. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Thankyou Guys.... Hugs 2 u all |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
it was a gorgeous poem just the way you put the words and the emotions together you got the ride of a life time and i would never change anything becuase it would take back that ride i just experienced i would have to say it is close to one of your best |
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Verg Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 52Colorado |
that was amazing |
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Verg Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 52Colorado |
plz read my poem in Dark Poetry #4, It's called Flames |
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Verg Member
since 2007-10-25
Posts 52Colorado |
i changed it to no more breathing in. |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
Hey! I love it! hope things get better for you and i totally understand im in your positon now.. thanks fir speaking my mind as well **hugs** Adreanna Leigh |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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