Teen Poetry #8 |
Wait it Out |
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
And a realization came upon me A sweet thing I’ve never known I was treated like I’ve always wanted All the time hiding, and completely condoned Do my words make real my actions? Does my face betray my inner thoughts? The look on you face so distorted And now my words tie themselves in knots I’m sick to my stomach, thinking of this I can’t be what you think I am- I’m just not But maybe in the heat of life, You’ll find someone who has your lot But for now I’ll wait out my term It’s the easiest thing to do And even though it seem surreal It’s the only line that’s true "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow [This message has been edited by RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed (09-14-2007 09:51 AM).] |
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since 2002-07-01
Posts 286Canada Edmonton |
So I haven't been on here in a while but I will try and remember how to Critique . I liked this a lot and I could understand what you we're saying mostly, it just seemed in some parts to jumble together almost. Anyways I liked. -Ash- |
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