He wraps his arms around me

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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

0 posted 2007-07-22 06:03 PM

Okay, guys...this one was written about two different guys...wierd i know. But i wrote the first two stanzas about a year ago, and i just finished the third. So bare with the first two

He wraps his arms around me
And pulls me to his chest.
A promise leaves his lips,
And i know he's the best...
He's more perfect than ever,
I hope he'll never leave.
I think that i'm in love,
But my heart just won't believe.

He wraps his arms around me,
And holds me oh so close.
He gives another promise,
He loves me the most.
I wish i could believe him,
I don't want him to go.
But why can't i love him back?
I guess we'll never know.

He wraps his arms around me,
And whispers in my ear.
I promise him, 'I love you'
And push away my fears.
I think that he believes me,
Because he's not turning away.
In fact, he's pulling me closer,
And promising he'll stay.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

[This message has been edited by BrittanyJ (07-23-2007 02:27 PM).]

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

1 posted 2007-07-22 07:44 PM

aw that was so cute, i think a good title be one that i don't give you- b/c titles aren't my specialty. but i would simply call it "he wraps his arms around me . . ."

-Red

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surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

2 posted 2007-07-22 08:33 PM

a title could be "why can't i love him"
and for the poem i loved it you couldn't tell that it was about 2 different guys it just seemed to be that you ended up loving the guy in the end and i would just like to say i kind of know how it feels to be like the first 2 stanzas however i haven't met the right someone so i don't really relate to the last one however nice job and i am glad you found your someone i can't wait to here your next poem

sexykitten15
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since 2007-07-22

Posts 34

3 posted 2007-07-22 10:00 PM

Like for me it was hard to tell where you were talking about a differant guy...

and so the ending sorta lost me.

but i really liked It i think i took it another way because it sorta fits my situation but i dont think it was about that.lol

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

4 posted 2007-07-22 11:32 PM

Yea, uh...i haven't found that someone yet...but the ending had to be happy, cause i was in a good mood. In fact, i don't think i've ever really been in love(well, with a guy who loved me back). But i can dream right...lol, thanks for the comments

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

5 posted 2007-07-23 03:48 PM

yah they both flowed toghether really well I couldn't at all tell that they were for two different guys. It seemed both the same

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

6 posted 2007-07-23 07:21 PM

Well Brittany just wait when you do fall in love it gonna be great. it's really a great feeling.... I loved this poem tho, the flow was awesome really one of my fav. from you.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Jezzika
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since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
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7 posted 2007-07-23 10:08 PM

This poem was so awesome..
I thought if flowed great...
LOVED IT!!

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