Teen Poetry #8 |
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Grief |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
My world came crumbling down Around me today The shattered pieces Scattered every which way Too broken It can't be put back It might be awhile Before everything aligns On just the right track I'll sit in this mess Till someone comes along To pick up the pieces left And gather my body In their warm brace Where I will stay Till the day It all comes crumbling down Around me once again Till then I will rest |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Ahh...i've been there before. Sometimes no one comes and you have to pick yourself up ![]() So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
very great write. i instantly had a emotion surge that sucked me into the piece. nice. ![]() |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Nicely done. BrittanyJ is right though. I wish you peace. Thanks for sharing and write on... ![]() If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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hunnie_girl![]() ![]()
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
woah I know exactly this feeling... ahh and I was trying to forget. oh well i'm glad this poem was what reminded me of the feeling instead of something else. hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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sexykitten15 Junior Member
since 2007-07-22
Posts 34 |
Ya i really enjoyed that.. I hope your not hurt a lot. Keep writing i love to read it~ |
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MegMeg Member
since 2007-05-14
Posts 85Virginia |
truly beautiful, i hope you'll feel better. |
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Leanne <3 Member
since 2007-08-25
Posts 216N.S.W, Australia |
yeahh i've been there before its written well though easy to relate to ![]() ![]() |
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