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Teen Poetry #8

It’s Alright to Cry

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
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0 posted 2007-07-16 06:56 PM

It’s Alright to Cry

So the weather’s a little sticky
And my mood is dark and lippy
You think that I’m lying to you
I never lie; I promise that it is true

I’m reading myself to sleep
My mind’s eye is in it and getting deep
You come and sit with me for hours on end
I don’t know what you wish me to mend

You talk of hearts and broken things
And then of moonlight and hairlet rings
I listen, best as I can
My nature is not so that I can listen on demand

I was never much for words and promises
My life is full of half made compromises
So let’s let action take its course
It does no good to try brute-like force

I’d had times like you’re going through
I thought I was alone and stuck like you
Untrue as it was, it seemed so real
Until I climbed to the other side of Hypocrisy Hill

It’s okay to cry
Tears don’t make you die
It’s alright to fear
It won’t make you any less dear

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
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1 posted 2007-07-16 09:02 PM

That's true, it is ok to cry, and it is ok to fear. You just have to know when to stop crying, and what fears to face to move on. I liked it, the flow was a little off, but i still liked it

Nice job.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

stargal
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since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2007-07-18 02:18 AM

Hey RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed,

Wow! I was greatly impressed by this poem, by the ending! I wasn't sure how you were going to end this or how the title fit but I feel like you wrapped it up quite nicely, it wasn't an abrupt ending and it wasn't on and on like a lot of poems. I really enjoyed reading this piece, I think it is the first one of yours I have read and I look forward to seeing what else you have posted

"The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away"
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