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totyfroty New Member
since 2007-07-06
Posts 6 |
hi guys This is a long poem and I hope you will like it tell me what you think Remember..... I loved and care Remember... I never betray It is you who hurt me Long time ago Now you are back Full of love and care You left nothing but despair It is too late my dear Finally, I am healed I spent years in pain I forgave but in vain Everyday you make a mistake You come to say It is out of my hand I will repent It is you I love They meant nothing Really, they don't? If I meant anything You wouldn't hurt me How many time you lied How many girl you hurt Do not play innocent on me You are a liar, you are deceptive You will end up all alone That is what you deserve I pity you, you know You will never feel love You will never be happy So, deceive and lie It will come back on you You will be miserable |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I spent years in pain I forgave but in vain my favorite lines I liked the flow of this part... hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
sounds like theres alot of emotion and hurt attached to this. i like how it starts out with the persona feeling one way and then at the end they feel the opposite way. i guess that's b/c alot of my own poems do that. "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi totyfroty, I really enjoyed reading your poem! As the person who posted prior to me, I liked the way the poem starts out on one emotion and ends on another. Thanks for sharing this piece, I hope to read more of your work in the near future  "The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away" |
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