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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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we never did talk about it before but I guess you realize by now that I would prefer to be one of your windows rather than any of your doors that you might close behind him sometimes while you would run to look for tomorrow on the other side of my usually mostly open then you would stand there in only your bronze and whisper those come play with me words and you would shiver lovely against my reflections I would rather be just your floor too than the bed you might leave sometimes when you woke up beside him with lonely on and hurried across my willing places to where I was part of your corner safety and you could be that little girl woman again playing in her man cave with dragons that only purred and licked her fingers and told her she was lovely in laughter colors and you would stay there until tomorrow looked in from the other side of my usually always open ________________ daark (circle of palms ) |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your circle of palms is usually, mostly, always a   Smiling in your eyes, I am... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun.. thanks lady of warm, you do smile my eyes |
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Rick Mordecon Junior Member
since 2009-02-05
Posts 10NYC, N.Y. |
I really liked this poem. What I liked most was the feeling of a thought unspoken which left your lines kind of hanging in the air. i found myself starting to try and complete the thoughts, then just let the lines complete themselves. Interesting structure. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: I am tempted to make squeaky little girl sounds to express the pleasure I feel in reading this poem! You are on a roll, dear D.!  Sooooooo good! Love, Margherita  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS....Under the skirts of palms, the pond safely dances with shadows and light |
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chweetkavi Junior Member
since 2009-02-05
Posts 15 |
good one...njoyed reading |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
such a pleasure to read...like yoga for the imagination...you bend the mind in such vocabulary-stretch-laden exercises...amazing |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Rick...thanks guy _____________ ms mar, you always bless me with your touch, thank you ________________ ms martie...thanks little neighbor _________________ chweet' thank you for the nod _______________ steavenr, thanks amigo |
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nebulous_nymph Junior Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 37Inertia |
soul-stroking stuff!,,good tonic for a fevered body....achoo! and thanks |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms nymph...thanks for the eyes lady and I hope you feel better soon, shall I make a house call? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I would rather be just your floor too than the bed you might leave sometimes when you woke up beside him with lonely on and hurried across my willing places to where I was part of your corner safety Refuges have feelings too... and hearts that beat to if-onlys. I understand these "druthers"... and still the need to give what's needed. *S* Superb work! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suthern..thanks so much for the touch |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
i think this is the best poem you have ever written well .. this one is now my favorite |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
then you would stand there in only your bronze and whisper those come play with me words and you would shiver lovely against my reflections Man, you write some great lines DS! Loved this animate to inanimate render of wishful thoughts. Eric |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick...now that just made me spin circles on my skateboard..(what us old guys call our rolling walkers) (grin) thanks babe _________________ eric...thanks so much guy |
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